Friday, May 19, 2006

EYES

Eyes filled with rage, I shouted
'How can you be so incompetent'
Eyes, equally fiery stared
incompetently, saying nothing !

Eyes flowing with compassion, I asked
'How can you be so indifferent to your loved ones'
Eyes, equally compassionate stared
indifferently, saying nothing !

Eyes full of contempt, I asked
'How can you be so lazy'
Eyes, equally contemptuous stared
lazily, saying nothing !

With commanding eyes , I thundered
'Do something about your flaws'
The mirror, with greater command, said
'You First !!'

12 Comments:

Blogger monu said...

WOW Jayan..you are getting better and better..i really liked this one...sooper!

keep em coming!

Tue Jul 05, 11:56:00 AM 2005  
Blogger Jayan said...

Merci Madame !! There will be some mroe coming :) your way

Tue Jul 05, 03:04:00 PM 2005  
Blogger G3 said...

hey man! thats really nice! The last two lines steal the show! :)

Tue Jul 05, 03:43:00 PM 2005  
Blogger Jayan said...

@Gayatri : The inspiration struck me during a Eureka moment :)

Tue Jul 05, 06:44:00 PM 2005  
Blogger Narayanan Venkitu said...

Umm...Jayan.!! Robert Frost is shivering in his grave.! Just kidding.!

Really great one...I knew something was coming in the end.!! Great ending.!

Wed Jul 06, 05:11:00 AM 2005  
Blogger Jayan said...

If there is 'Frost', Robert will shiver for sure !!

Wed Jul 06, 06:40:00 PM 2005  
Blogger Nirek said...

Superb da! I could guess the end of the poem in the middle, nice work!

Fri May 19, 07:15:00 PM 2006  
Blogger Srini said...

Dude,

I've been reading a few of ur poems and needless to say, this is definitely a hidden talent that has popped its head out. Bring the entire creature out and before you realize, someone could give you a covetous title -Sai 'Milton' Dhananjayan?

Excellent work! Keep the ball rolling.

Sun May 21, 05:13:00 PM 2006  
Blogger ashok said...

gug gud..keep writing

Mon May 29, 01:47:00 AM 2006  
Blogger Jayan said...

@Ashoko, Srini and Satu : Thank you for your appreciation guys !

Mon May 29, 03:53:00 PM 2006  
Blogger Gayatri said...

Great but REPEAT from your old post. Not fair, looking forward to something fresh.

Fri Jun 02, 06:48:00 PM 2006  
Blogger Redi said...

Sai,
On cloud nine?
clouded by vain?
but the poem's not in vain!

Call me NRI!

Sun Sep 16, 10:22:00 AM 2007  

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