EYES
Eyes filled with rage, I shouted
'How can you be so incompetent'
Eyes, equally fiery stared
incompetently, saying nothing !
Eyes flowing with compassion, I asked
'How can you be so indifferent to your loved ones'
Eyes, equally compassionate stared
indifferently, saying nothing !
Eyes full of contempt, I asked
'How can you be so lazy'
Eyes, equally contemptuous stared
lazily, saying nothing !
With commanding eyes , I thundered
'Do something about your flaws'
The mirror, with greater command, said
'You First !!'
posted by Unknown at 1:45 PM
12 Comments:
WOW Jayan..you are getting better and better..i really liked this one...sooper!
keep em coming!
Merci Madame !! There will be some mroe coming :) your way
hey man! thats really nice! The last two lines steal the show! :)
@Gayatri : The inspiration struck me during a Eureka moment :)
Umm...Jayan.!! Robert Frost is shivering in his grave.! Just kidding.!
Really great one...I knew something was coming in the end.!! Great ending.!
If there is 'Frost', Robert will shiver for sure !!
Superb da! I could guess the end of the poem in the middle, nice work!
Dude,
I've been reading a few of ur poems and needless to say, this is definitely a hidden talent that has popped its head out. Bring the entire creature out and before you realize, someone could give you a covetous title -Sai 'Milton' Dhananjayan?
Excellent work! Keep the ball rolling.
gug gud..keep writing
@Ashoko, Srini and Satu : Thank you for your appreciation guys !
Great but REPEAT from your old post. Not fair, looking forward to something fresh.
Sai,
On cloud nine?
clouded by vain?
but the poem's not in vain!
Call me NRI!
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